I like that. "Death" just kind of stopped me before, since the rest sounded like a childhood memory.
Who among us can ignore the allure of really funny math puns?
Willow ,'Empty Places'
The Great Write Way, Act Three: Where's the gun?
A place for Buffistas to discuss, beta and otherwise deal and dish on their non-fan fiction projects.
Ginger - Aug 29, 2008 8:16:00 am PDT #830 of 6681
"It didn't taste good. It tasted soooo horrible. It tasted like....a vodka martini." - Matilda
Typo Boy - Aug 29, 2008 8:24:25 am PDT #831 of 6681
Calli: My people have a saying. A man who trusts can never be betrayed, only mistaken.Avon: Life expectancy among your people must be extremely short.
Fascinating watching the process of wrestling with something like this. Though you might not believe it from my verbose tendencies I was trained to be over-concise - the fewest words were best. Watching you polish by adding words to make it clearer, and improving the emotional tone as a result. So contrary to the "always cut, never add" that was pounded into my head. And a living demonstration of how wrong it was, at least the extreme version I was taught.
Wolfram - Aug 29, 2008 8:58:31 am PDT #832 of 6681
Visilurking
Brevity is my strongest and weakest aspect in writing. I also prefer less words to more, but now it's a chore to add any words at all. My initial stories are two sentences. Then I have to add from there.
Barb - Aug 29, 2008 9:27:00 am PDT #833 of 6681
“Not dead yet!”
So contrary to the "always cut, never add" that was pounded into my head.
To me, that's very much a journalistic dictum-- or one for people who write within genres that are very closely constrained by word count.
Which is why I know I'll never be a good journalist or short story writer; my strengths are definitely more geared towards the long form.
Laga - Aug 29, 2008 9:28:14 am PDT #834 of 6681
You should know I'm a big deal in the Resistance.
you painted a picture in my head, Barb. A delicious one.
Typo Boy - Aug 29, 2008 10:21:49 am PDT #835 of 6681
Calli: My people have a saying. A man who trusts can never be betrayed, only mistaken.Avon: Life expectancy among your people must be extremely short.
To me, that's very much a journalistic dictum-- or one for people who write within genres that are very closely constrained by word count.
It does not even work well in extended non-fiction, or in a lot of magazine journalism. One of the things I have had to get over.
Lee - Aug 31, 2008 6:29:33 pm PDT #836 of 6681
The feeling you get when your brain finally lets your heart get in its pants.
The buzz challenge is now closed.
The new challenge is hats.
Beverly - Aug 31, 2008 7:37:26 pm PDT #837 of 6681
Days shrink and grow cold, sunlight through leaves is my song. Winter is long.
As the short fella stood watching, the tall guy stood behind the table, one arm held dramatically out before him, the other hand gripping the brim of a shiny top hat. He wiggled the fingers of his outstretched hand as the drum rolled.
The little guy in the helmet and goggles squinched his eyes shut as the tall fellow’s hand descended into the hat. His head tipped slightly, his rack of antlers magnifying the tilt. Suddenly his hand emerged, fingers clutched in the poll of a giant bear, which let out an unhappy roar.
“I gotta get a new hat.”
SailAweigh - Aug 31, 2008 7:43:59 pm PDT #838 of 6681
Nana korobi, ya oki. (Fall down seven times, stand up eight.) ~Yuzuru Hanyu/Japanese proverb
Awww, Bev. You make me miss Saturday morning cartoons.
Beverly - Aug 31, 2008 8:06:12 pm PDT #839 of 6681
Days shrink and grow cold, sunlight through leaves is my song. Winter is long.
Hee! 100 woids, on the nosey.