That sounds like a great way to ease into it. I do better with prompts, too.
Plus bonus points for use of the word 'mosey'.
Oz ,'Same Time, Same Place'
The Great Write Way, Act Three: Where's the gun?
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SailAweigh - Jun 20, 2016 12:23:07 pm PDT #6442 of 6685
Nana korobi, ya oki. (Fall down seven times, stand up eight.) ~Yuzuru Hanyu/Japanese proverb
Beverly - Jun 20, 2016 6:45:12 pm PDT #6443 of 6685
Days shrink and grow cold, sunlight through leaves is my song. Winter is long.
That's amazingly powerful, askye. One tiny thing--hurl means to throw some*thing*, hurtle means to fling oneself. I think you need hurtle there, but I'm not sure.
askye - Jun 21, 2016 3:08:06 am PDT #6444 of 6685
Thrive to spite them
Thanks Bev this is still the first ish draft. I did fix one line that was missing words. That kind of feedback is why u posted it. And I was really happy I could write something. I may work with it when I'm at the beach or let it wait until I get back to a comouter. I want to mess around with the format some.
hippocampus - Jun 21, 2016 3:58:20 am PDT #6445 of 6685
not your mom's socks.
askye, that's lovely. I like the way you're working through short lines and long, big concepts and small armor-chinks.
askye - Jun 21, 2016 7:57:34 pm PDT #6446 of 6685
Thrive to spite them
Thank you Sox that means a lot to hear.
askye - Jul 12, 2016 9:44:40 am PDT #6447 of 6685
Thrive to spite them
So I've done a few more poetry prompt things in Second Life. Not all of them are worth sharing.
but "meat safe" is the prompt today and this is what I came up with. Too many ideas were going on so I kind of tightened it up
Hannibal
Gore porn
It's on tv freely
The censors so afraid of nudity
But they let the bodies have more blood
Censors love it
More than
Kisses
Caresses
Barenakedness
Because nudity is shame and sex is shame but
Violence is what we
Live for
Die for
Watch for
The new sport
Watching hannibal
The cannibal
Saw comes on at 2 pm on Saturday
Blurred only some, the worst bits but not all the blood
Approved blood must be
violently sourced
Drained from veins
Exploding from brains
Censors balk and blanche at
Blood on Kotex
Playtex or tampex
We can't hurt delicate sensibilities
So it's
Blue water
On white cotton
Because it's
(hushed whispers now)
Shameful
It's
(stage voice now)
vulgar
But Hannibal can have more blood and gore
Saw can be on 2 pm on Saturday
They crave and crave and crave
Blood as it sprays
Arterial
As it drips
And drops
From slow tortuous cuts
Censors agree
That's okay
They squirm and turn away from
Blood not violently torn from
A female
SailAweigh - Jul 12, 2016 1:00:36 pm PDT #6448 of 6685
Nana korobi, ya oki. (Fall down seven times, stand up eight.) ~Yuzuru Hanyu/Japanese proverb
Damn, askye. That cuts like a knife. (Sorry, but your imagery has gotten under my skin.)
askye - Jul 12, 2016 1:19:05 pm PDT #6449 of 6685
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Thank you.
I haven't been doing these poetry prompts much but I need to because when the prompt is good for me it brings up all kinds of things.
askye - Jul 12, 2016 1:21:52 pm PDT #6450 of 6685
Thrive to spite them
I really need to find some ... critique group or a workshop group in SL so I can improve what I write.
Zenkitty - Jul 12, 2016 1:25:08 pm PDT #6451 of 6685
Every now and then, I think I might actually be a little odd.
Dang, askye. That's good.