So I got some great feedback on the songwriting contest I enter every year. This year I entered two pieces, a completed song and one that was just lyrics. I scored worse on both pieces, but I got really good written critique. Here's the lyrics one:
COMMENTS: This piece is full of intriguing poetics and clever wordplay. However what and who these lines are referring to is never made clear. Keep in mind that publishers favor themes that have a focused premise and emotional impact. So try to paint a more vivid picture of whom and what the words are about (while not assuming that the listener already knows). There is talent here so keep writing and learning the craft!
Lots of good, specific stuff I can work from. And I rated better in some categories than I have in the past, things I was specifically working, so I feel like I'm getting better. I really like this contest.