Anyone up for a beta of about 1800 words? It's been such a shitty chapter to write, so much gloom. It worries me. From here on in, Sam's adventure buoys up in tone and tempo, and chapter three is hilarious. But i just can't seem to get past the owl's loss of her babies, I can't seem to grasp it in a way that isn't making me either cry or beat my head against the keyboard from the melodrama.
Spike: At least give me Wesley's office since he's gone. Angel: He's not gone. He's on a leave of absence. Spike: Yeah, right. Boo-hoo. Thought he killed his bloody father. Try staking your mother when she's coming on to you! Harmony: Well…that explains a lot.
'Destiny'
The Great Write Way, Act Three: Where's the gun?
A place for Buffistas to discuss, beta and otherwise deal and dish on their non-fan fiction projects.
Allyson - Aug 10, 2008 5:08:01 pm PDT #545 of 6681
Wait, is this real-world child support, where the money goes to buy food for the kids, or MRA fantasyland child support where the women just buy Ferraris and cocaine? -Jessica
Beverly - Aug 10, 2008 5:27:31 pm PDT #546 of 6681
Days shrink and grow cold, sunlight through leaves is my song. Winter is long.
Send it Allyson. I'm always eager to take a look.
And you know, I may not have anything to offer except, "It reads fine, to me." But I'll be glad to take a look.
Barb - Aug 10, 2008 5:37:06 pm PDT #547 of 6681
“Not dead yet!”
If you want, Allyson, I'll take a look. Profile email is fine.
Toddson - Aug 11, 2008 4:46:12 am PDT #548 of 6681
Friends don't let friends read "Atlas Shrugged"
Also, after some reading I've been doing, may I suggest getting a Buffista copyeditor? I am SO fed up with reading books that misuse words, use words to mean the exact opposite of what they mean, can't keep track of their characters' names. damn. (I mean, really - the book I began reading this weekend had a character change his name about three chapters in. And one I read when I was sick was referring to the "penile system" ... sigh.)
Ginger - Aug 11, 2008 5:14:35 am PDT #549 of 6681
"It didn't taste good. It tasted soooo horrible. It tasted like....a vodka martini." - Matilda
Allyson, I'd love to help beta whenever you need it. I already love Sam.
Todd, have you seen that Honda TV spot where the Mr. Opportunity cartoon character says "At savings that could be very *wink, wink* opportunistic." Opportunistic definition: "taking immediate advantage, often unethically, of any circumstance of possible benefit." That is the way I think of car dealers, but I didn't think they'd admit it in advertising.
There's also a Chevron ad in which they boast of drilling in "unchartered waters." Sigh.
Barb - Aug 11, 2008 5:22:24 am PDT #550 of 6681
“Not dead yet!”
It's not just in books, Toddson-- I read an AP article on Tom Daley yesterday and had to spit three times in response to not only the poor writing, but at the fact that the writer of the piece said something to the effect of "Daley, a Britain," as opposed to "Briton."
::headdesk::
Toddson - Aug 11, 2008 6:15:41 am PDT #551 of 6681
Friends don't let friends read "Atlas Shrugged"
The one misuse that makes me see red - using "descendent" to mean their grandparents, great-grandparents, etc. ... known to those of us who actually know English as "ancestors". snarl.
sumi - Aug 11, 2008 6:51:24 am PDT #552 of 6681
Art Crawl!!!
Yes! I hear that all the time. I don't understand the confusion.
DebetEsse - Aug 11, 2008 9:37:56 am PDT #553 of 6681
Woe to the fucking wicked.
Well, we are clearly on an upward trajectory, so the downward direction would be the past!
Amy - Aug 11, 2008 10:35:55 am PDT #554 of 6681
Because books.
Burrell, you have e, way late.