Everything looks good from here... Yes. Yes, this is a fertile land, and we will thrive. We will rule over all this land, and we will call it... 'This Land.' I think we should call it 'your grave!' Ah, curse your sudden but inevitable betrayal! Ha ha HA! Mine is an evil laugh! Now die! Oh, no, God! Oh, dear God in heaven!

Wash ,'Serenity'


The Great Write Way, Act Three: Where's the gun?

A place for Buffistas to discuss, beta and otherwise deal and dish on their non-fan fiction projects.


Strix - Sep 12, 2011 6:14:25 pm PDT #4639 of 6719
A dress should be tight enough to show you're a woman but loose enough to flee from zombies. — Ginger

Ah, great ending! I like the way it leaves it open for thinking about possibilities and repercussions. (ETA: Sox' story, not Barb's raspberry. :stern frown: )

Nicely done, Sox!


hippocampus - Sep 13, 2011 4:10:36 am PDT #4640 of 6719
not your mom's socks.

Thanks, Erin!

Hey Amy, when's your tour taking you to ... Philly??


Amy - Sep 13, 2011 4:41:21 am PDT #4641 of 6719
Because books.

It's not! Although I am trying to arrange something at the Chester County Books.


hippocampus - Sep 13, 2011 5:43:34 am PDT #4642 of 6719
not your mom's socks.

We need to fix that - unless that gets you in trouble with your publisher. Then we won't.


Amy - Sep 13, 2011 5:47:50 am PDT #4643 of 6719
Because books.

Why would it get me in trouble? They'll be happy to support any other publicity I can put together.


hippocampus - Sep 13, 2011 6:09:01 am PDT #4644 of 6719
not your mom's socks.

cool. I will put my thinking cap on.


Toddson - Sep 13, 2011 6:30:12 am PDT #4645 of 6719
Friends don't let friends read "Atlas Shrugged"

Amy, I watched the little trailer - I noticed that your cover (the best, I think) is the only one without a young woman on it. It's distinctive and, so to speak, cool.


Amy - Sep 13, 2011 6:52:44 am PDT #4646 of 6719
Because books.

Aw, thanks, Todd!


Barb - Sep 14, 2011 1:34:29 pm PDT #4647 of 6719
“Not dead yet!”

I needs help, y'all. (Well, beyond the usual...)

Anyhoo, a producer has apparently expressed interest in Haunted, my ghost YA. (MEEP) Loves the concept, loves the writing, loves everything except she feels that the blurb/pitch as it stands, is a bit soft/cerebral/intellectual, so she wants a bit of a harder hook.

This is the blurb as it stands:

A fatal betrayal sends Matthew and Emily on a journey that traverses the boundaries between life and death. Combining elements of The Sixth Sense and The Time Traveler's Wife, A Single Haunted Memory explores themes of destiny and fate, guilt and retribution, and asks the question, where does the line between life and death truly lie?

Which, okay, I can understand the whole "too cerebral" thing, using TTW and Sixth Sense, especially since we're talking about a YA book. But I need a new one liner.

HALP?


Amy - Sep 14, 2011 1:41:58 pm PDT #4648 of 6719
Because books.

Barb, I'm so brain dead and I read it so long ago. What happens exactly? I can't really work with just that.

In general, for YA I think you want something hookier, not just harder. Like (and this is just an example, not based on your proposal): He's dead. She's not. But they're in love ...

You know what I mean?