I like Philippa, which is English and the fact it contains a male name is a subtle hint of her determination.
Tracy: Well-- That call -- That call means you just murdered me. Mal: No, son. You murdered yourself. I just carried the bullet a while.
'The Message'
The Great Write Way, Act Three: Where's the gun?
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Scrappy - Apr 12, 2008 7:55:51 pm PDT #31 of 6681
Life moves pretty fast. You don't stop and look around once in a while, you could miss it.
SailAweigh - Apr 12, 2008 7:56:54 pm PDT #32 of 6681
Nana korobi, ya oki. (Fall down seven times, stand up eight.) ~Yuzuru Hanyu/Japanese proverb
Hermione is too sweet sounding to me. I'd go for Eleanor. It has a queenly pedigree to it.
sarameg - Apr 12, 2008 7:58:47 pm PDT #33 of 6681
Oookay, I'm still dubious about this teenage poetry endeavor, as I thought the last was really the best (and omg, the angst in some of these that I probably WON'T share):
Time is an endless
Circle.
Forever repeating with
endless variations,
Shaping our minds,
Changing our lives
Into rings of memories.
And the first I remember writing, at maybe 13 or 15 or, I don't really know, I tie it up with my maternal grandmother's death years earlier and seeing Orion from the bedroom window, and how that has been a constant solace (and I don't know if the poem will ever convey that. Just that it has that touchpoint for the adult me now):
"I want to be a star"
she cried.
"What kind of star?"
they asked.
"A star in the sky star"
"Oh really?"
"Yes"
"Why?
they pressed.
"I would be free
to shine,
To be wished upon.
To have children
point at me
and say
"There's you!"
She grew
Old
As she died
she said
"I want to be a star,
a star in the sky star."
And she flew
Upwards
And shone
with light.
Taking her place, up
up in the sky.
A child cries
"There's you!
I want to be a star,
a star in the sky star,
up there."
Anne W. - Apr 13, 2008 4:22:21 am PDT #34 of 6681
The lost sheep grow teeth, forsake their lambs, and lie with the lions.
Damn it, sara, that last one made me cry. That's lovely. I'd be tempted to revisit how/where the lines break, but other than that I absolutely love it.
sj - Apr 13, 2008 5:08:00 am PDT #35 of 6681
"There are few hours in life more agreeable than the hour dedicated to the ceremony known as afternoon tea."
Susan, I like the name Eleanor for that character.
Anne W. - Apr 13, 2008 5:09:15 am PDT #36 of 6681
The lost sheep grow teeth, forsake their lambs, and lie with the lions.
Susan, I like Eleanor because of the "_____ of Acquitaine" associations. That'll convey a fair amount of ruthlessness and toughness.
Lee - Apr 13, 2008 8:48:55 am PDT #37 of 6681
The feeling you get when your brain finally lets your heart get in its pants.
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Laga - Apr 13, 2008 9:08:28 am PDT #38 of 6681
You should know I'm a big deal in the Resistance.
I like Philippa
Deena - Apr 13, 2008 9:19:57 am PDT #39 of 6681
How are you me? You need to stop that. Only I can be me. ~Kara
I rather like Beatrice because it wouldn't imply ruthlessness, making it much more interesting when she first rolls right over someone.
Sara, I love the second one too.
I have had no drabbles lately. Maybe this time I'll find one.
Susan W. - Apr 13, 2008 6:03:47 pm PDT #40 of 6681
Good Trouble and Righteous Fights
I'm now leaning toward Philippa, even though I like Eleanor, too, because if we have another daughter in a year or two, we might name her Eleanor, but Philippa sounds funny with our last name.
Sigh. ION, I hope writing plotty action scenes eventually gets easier for me. I just tried to pass what amounted to handwavium by my CPs, because I needed a scene where one of my protagonists is captured by his enemies to work out a certain way that isn't necessarily the most logical way for the enemies in question to behave. The two CPs who are least alike, the ones where if they agree on something, I know it's a problem, have both weighed in to say, "Um, your villain's plan makes no sense at all." I think I've found a way around it, but it's going to be tougher, I'm going to have to completely rewrite the last 20 pages of my WIP (after spending the entire week rewriting earlier scenes), and I'm going to have to lose a sequence I was particularly fond of because there's no longer a way to shoehorn it in.
Sigh. As of May 1 I'll have been working on this manuscript for a full year, and I'm at least 150 pages from the end, probably more like 200-250. Someone please assure me I'll finish this thing someday...