ooooh

Skipping forward to work on the ending got me unstuck, and it's also going to save me some rewriting. The ending is basically a big battle, and when I skipped ahead I put myself in my protagonist's head and tried to figure out why he was fighting there. He's a wily, highly intelligent man; he's not going to allow himself to be trapped into a fight against overwhelming odds for no good reason. (And "because the plot needs a battle here" and "it makes for a cool historical parallel" don't qualify as good reasons!) Eventually I hashed out a reason that made sense, but one that completely changes the whole set-up of how and why they get to the place where the pivotal battle happens. I.e., the part I skipped past.

I also reached p. 400 on the manuscript about 20 minutes ago! Woohoo!

Last but not least, I got my PNWA feedback forms today. I knew they must be good or I wouldn't have finaled, but one of my judges just raved and gushed about the idea, and my writing, and all that wonderful ego-boosting stuff. The only negative thing s/he said was to very nicely point out that I really need to reveal the ending in my synopsis...but the thing is, I do reveal it. It's just that since this is the end of Book One, the ending is "Our heroes live to fight another day, although unbeknownst to them the help they're counting on will never arrive," as opposed to "Our heroes triumph and live happily ever after." I'd thought it would be obvious it's the first book in a series, and I'm sort of huffy and embarrassed that anyone would think I'm such a rank amateur as to not reveal my story's ending in the synopsis! So I guess I need some sort of line about how this is the first book of a proposed series or something to that effect.

But other than that, the judge said it was a great idea, and "so cool," with "a real cause, a real protagonist, super antagonists, wonderful game of 'what if?'"

And the other judge was nearly as complimentary, only suggesting that I try to get in a little more descriptive sensory detail. Which is totally one of my weak points and something I'm going to address on revision. But s/he praised my characterization, pacing, story hook, etc.

So, all in all, this is a good day.

Nightmare last night. Don't know if this is good surreality or just word salad.
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Short Bus to Brazil

Plants hang from the ceiling. Green tendrils brush past windows, brush widows who crowd the road we travel. All seats filled, all aisles crowded. Each stop plucks us from crowds, from clouds. Of dead? Of survivors? The crush pushes us to the rear, miles past the backseat. Yet somehow we still ride the bus, ride the short bus heading endlessly down, endlessly south. Where is our stop? Maybe they'll let us off someday, someday when we've gone all the way down, all the way South, as far South as there is. Maybe they'll let us off when we reach Brazil…

Oooh, I like that Typo. Creepy.

Thanks Sail. Is it clear that the idea that Brazil is "as far South as there is" is the character's confusion and not the author's?

Yes.

Thanks, normally I can judge my work, even when it is based on a dream. But this is not based on a dream, it is a near perfect narration of what I woke up screaming to - so really cant self-evaluate anything on this one. And yeah I know that dream narrations are the stories you make up as you wake up, but still a difference between grabbing of bits of one, and writing down what feels like a close and fairly complete narration. Zero distance. Zero ability to judge.

Zero distance. Zero ability to judge.

Dreams are weird that way. You wake up in a total cold sweat, but when you look at it later your brain is kind of WTF? Part of your brain is going "dude, it was a dream" and the lizard part is just going "aaaeeeyyyeeee."

Typo - really nice vision. Except for the waking up screaming. You got it on paper though; that's something.

Both backseat and green prompts are now closed.

This week's prompt is barter.