One problem I have is that I'm trying to compare how my stuff stacks up to audiobooks I download from my library, just in terms of flow and dialogue. It's not easy to compensate for text-to-speech vs. an actual person.
I have learned that attributions and physical beats are sometimes awkward. I reuse words in the same paragraph too often. A lot of my sentences have more words than needed. I have a lot of work to do. On the plus side, I think the story is good and my feedback seems to support that so far. I think I have something that can be good, but I need to work on my craft.