SCRIPT TIP THAT'S NOT IN A BOOK Don't read Nick Hornby and write "Entourage" at the same time. While it makes for a nice tour of The Male Experience, you'll find yourself wondering when Johnny Drama got a "mobile" pretty fast.

Chapter 4 first revision is done. I also went back and added more revisions to chapter 1. I'm thinking of posting the evolution of chapter 1 on my blog. I think that could be kind of interesting. There are at least 4 versions so far that I could post up there.

Tonight, more chapter 5 I think. I have a couple of paragraphs, but that's it so far. Hopefully, it will be the last all new chapter for a bit.

I worked on my blog for awhile and finally really got going on chapter 5. Chapter 5 is all brand new so it is the first time I've written something brand new since I've done some revision. Chapter 1 was all new, but I hadn't revised anything yet when I wrote it. I think my initial writing has improved quite a bit as a result of having done some revision.

Revision will do that. Look at that word--it says re-vision. You're looking at your story anew. I think I enjoy revision and refining the vision better than getting the story down rough, but that's just me. I'm a tweaker by nature.

No, not that kind of tweaker, the kind who stands in front of a table arranging and rearranging the objects on it until they make a *perfect* and balanced display.

Yeah, revision can be an addiction. "No wait, I can make this *even better!*"

I probably prefer the rough draft process, but there is something satisfying about polishing too.

Now that I've done some revision, I'm much more sensitive to using words that tell emotions, starting sentences certain ways, using passive voice, and other stuff.

Also, thanks for being willing to look at more chapters Bev.

Oooh, I should be getting my copy of MS Word tomorrow. I've been spending a lot of time in my word processor and Open Office has worked well enough, but it just isn't as good as Word. Also, MS Office for home use is unexpectedly cheap.

I finished chapter 5 revised, which is a misnomer because the content is all new. Tonight hopefully I will have time to read through it and tweak a bit before moving on to chapter 6 revised. Another chapter that will need heavy reworking.

I'm looking forward to chapter 7/8. They'll need work, but not the almost complete replacement I've been doing so far. Also, a couple of really interesting characters come into play. After that, I'll probably revisit chapter 1 and 2 again.

Help me set the scene: LA fender-bender between a rich guy in a midlife-crisis Ferrari and some college kids in a mom car...how long would they wait for the cops to show up? Would they feel inclined to stay in their cars? (I've been involved in an accident or two, but wheelchairs are always tied to the floor)

I don't know about LA, but here people get out of their cars and will wait quite awhile for the police if there is damage.

Ok, that's sort of what I pictured, but I'm only sure what to do when people are having coffee or something. Minor damage, but there's some.