People. People, people. Not you people,
those
people.
You know my favorite illustration of "check your metaphors" is "His eyes slid down the front of her dress"? It may have a challenger: "[Name] watches him intently with big question marks tattooed in his eyes."
Ow. Owowowowow, and OW!
That's awesome. I'd still have to go with the first one as the champion though.
I got a block of time for writing during my vacation day and I'm now plowing through chapter 3 quickly.
DW has starting reading chapter 1 and 2 and writing down comments about stuff. It's a biased opinion, but she has been really positive about it so far. She's a smart, well-read person, so I value her opinions and comments. Her grammar is better than mine too, which is quite a help.
Thanks! I'm up to about 45 pages on the word processor, so I figured it was about time to let someone read what I had so far to make sure I wasn't going off in an unintelligible direction.
I have made chapter 3 my bitch. Onward to chapter 4.
Chapter 3 was a lot of fun, lots of action, a protracted fight at the end, and a serious wound.
Chapter 4 will probably be mostly character stuff until the very end. That will be fun in a different way.
I think I'm posting too much.
Nah, Gud. I'm getting a kick out of your enthusiasm. It's fun!
Dude. You're totally rocking it, and I'm always glad to see Buffistas writing.