I have nothing to say about adverbs or "he saids" that adds anything to this conversation.

I did check back through some of my old writing to see if I was guilty, because I do have a tendency not to bother with tagging dialog. But both projects I looked at had no dialog at all at the point I'd left them, so, nevermind.

Anyway, instead I'm going to post a slightly reworked version of the song I'm on now. Added a third verse, as per deb, and it needed it. I couldn't get away from starting and ending, so I moved some stuff around and cut a bit. See if it's any better.

cop sunglasses

your smile is just like cop sunglasses, yes that is
what your smile is just like, cop sunglasses, yes
your smile is just like cop sunglasses, yes, that is
what your smile is just like

i know i'm in for trouble
when i see that smile start to bubble
up i go ahead and blow the hatches
out i float the tanks 'cause that smile is matchless

yes, your smile is just like cop sunglasses, yes that is
what your smile is just like, it's like cop sunglasses
your smile is just like cop sunglasses, yes, that is
what your smile is just like

you lay it out like ammunition
when things get cagey or your reputation's
down on the line then that smile clicks
in place on your face like you flicked a switch

oh, you think you've got your bases covered
all your emotion safely shuttered
behind that smile like missile silos
under all that rubble i guess you know i know

that your smile is just like cop sunglasses, yes that is
what your smile is just like

I've read a few good writing books, but I don't expect to be Shown The Way anymore from any of them. But they all have a little something to offer that might help.

I'm always terrified of reading writing books.

Really? Why? Are you Doing it Wrong? Although one I did have to give up on because it asked me not to give a character anything physically insurmountable, and even then I knew that would dent my ouevre, and I couldn't have that.

I think any kind of advice book has stuff to take and stuff to leave. I mean, I don't write fiction, but every grant writing guide has a section that says YOU MUST ARRANGE IT IN THIS ORDER, but each guide gives a different order. So obviously, no one can follow all the books. You take what works for you/your situation and leave the rest. I mean, right?

Debra Dixon's Goal, Motivation and Conflict

I just had to ask someone the other day what GMC meant, because I had no idea what they were talking about.

it asked me not to give a character anything physically insurmountable

Because heaven knows no one ever has situations that simply must be coped with and aren't going to go away, because that's just silly and Everything Always Ends Well.

Feh.

My least favorite bit of advice is "What's your theme? You've got to have a premise!" "Uh, OK, my theme is life is hard." "All right, does each and every scene promote that theme?" "Look, I'm just trying to get the silly fool to go kiss the guy, OK? Higher truth is just going to have to wait a bit."

I know, Connie. Tell God that, right? She did not get that memo, obviously.

Liese, I love more than is probably healthy the line

all your emotion safely shuttered/behind that smile like missile silos