You have the emotional maturity of a blueberry scone.

Giles ,'Touched'


The Great Write Way  

A place for Buffistas to discuss, beta and otherwise deal and dish on their non-fan fiction projects.


erikaj - Jan 21, 2005 5:40:24 am PST #9618 of 10001
Always Anti-fascist!

Thanks...and I haven't smoked any of the stuff from the evidence room yet.


deborah grabien - Jan 21, 2005 7:05:25 am PST #9619 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.

BWAHAHAHHAHAHAHAHA!

Honey, I woke up feeling cranky as hell - forget to take a flexoril last night and the result is aching all over and less than three hours sleep.

I have cheered up considerably.

A long face like my cousin Ed....


erikaj - Jan 21, 2005 7:49:25 am PST #9620 of 10001
Always Anti-fascist!

Ok, then, my mental collapse is worth it, then.


Susan W. - Jan 21, 2005 12:24:21 pm PST #9621 of 10001
Good Trouble and Righteous Fights

I've now got two agents committed to our conference. I rule.

I hope they'll be this friendly when I have a book to pitch to them!


Beverly - Jan 21, 2005 1:07:42 pm PST #9622 of 10001
Days shrink and grow cold, sunlight through leaves is my song. Winter is long.

Go Susan! Good work.

erika, I'm still laughing. That was priceless.


sj - Jan 22, 2005 4:14:21 pm PST #9623 of 10001
"There are few hours in life more agreeable than the hour dedicated to the ceremony known as afternoon tea."

Go Susan!


erikaj - Jan 22, 2005 5:19:19 pm PST #9624 of 10001
Always Anti-fascist!

Just because a "horse is a horse," doesn't mean he's comfortable. Although, I'm afraid that makes me like Catherine the Great, now.


Susan W. - Jan 22, 2005 9:52:09 pm PST #9625 of 10001
Good Trouble and Righteous Fights

Brainstorming help requested for a tough scene:

Anna has just learned that her husband Sebastian is dead. She's still mostly in the stunned disbelief stage. But because her marriage was miserable, some little part of her is already chanting "Free! Free! Free!" She naturally feels guilty about this, because Sebastian was far from capital-E Evil--he was just a pompous git, and no husband for a woman with Anna's brains and spirit.

With her is her cousin's wife Helen, the best friend she has among the officer's wives. Helen is a brisk, matter-of-fact sort. She's a bit older--30 to Anna's 22. She and her husband Alex are the only ones in the regiment who realize just how bad the Anna-Sebastian marriage was, and because of the family tie they're firmly on Anna's side.

So I've got these women alone in a room together a few pages into Chapter Two, and I want them to have a conversation that'll let me fill the readers in on why Anna married Sebastian and what went wrong, whether through actual dialogue or by setting Anna to musing about it. We saw in Chapter One that Anna was so miserable that she was half-trying to provoke Sebastian into at least a temporary separation--make him angry enough to send her back to England--and I'd like to bring that out a little more, have her revisit her thoughts and actions of Chapter One.

But so far every attempt I've made to get Anna and Helen talking has fallen flat. It either winds up perfectly conventional, no undercurrents whatsoever, or something perilously close to this:

Helen: Woohoo! Your nasty husband is dead!
Anna: I can't rejoice at death. It'd be Wrong.
Helen: C'mon. I know he made you miserable.
Anna: Well, OK, he did. Woohoo! I'm going to (Regency) Disneyland!

Any ideas?


Anne W. - Jan 23, 2005 2:59:53 am PST #9626 of 10001
The lost sheep grow teeth, forsake their lambs, and lie with the lions.

Hmm. That's a poser. Maybe it could end up with Anna grieving, not for Sebastian but the might-have-beens, the happy marriage she wishes she'd had with him, etc. She could also admit to Helen that she feels like a monster because she knows she should be sad, not relieved.

Does that help? It could take the "Woohoo" factor out of the scenario.


Susan W. - Jan 23, 2005 5:23:32 am PST #9627 of 10001
Good Trouble and Righteous Fights

Ooh, I can work with that. Thanks, Anne! The trick is getting there, of course, but I've got another few ideas that I'm going to try.