Hey, don't worry about it. Nest full of vampires, you come get me, okay. Box full of puppies, that's more of a judgement call.

Jonathan ,'Lies My Parents Told Me'


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A place for Buffistas to discuss, beta and otherwise deal and dish on their non-fan fiction projects.


dcp - Nov 27, 2004 9:32:31 pm PST #8269 of 10001
The more I learn, the more I realize how little I know.

Drabble:

Thirty years sure have changed the old wooden house that I lived in when I was in elementary school. Now it is the Psychology Lab building of Davidson College.

Outside, there is a wheelchair ramp leading from the driveway to the kitchen door. Inside, the living room has a new wall down the middle, dividing the reception area from the interview room. The bedrooms are now professors' offices. The laundry room is filled with shelves of office supplies. My old room is filled with a line of tables sporting half a dozen computer work stations.

And they have air conditioning!


Susan W. - Nov 28, 2004 6:27:49 am PST #8270 of 10001
Good Trouble and Righteous Fights

Fifteen Years

In my imagination, my parents are eternally as they were when I left for college: a couple in their 50’s, my mother plump, silver-haired, and cheerful, my father full of that restless energy that runs so strongly in our family. What’s left of his hair is more strawberry blond than gray.

Fifteen years have passed. Now when I go home I’m shocked. My mother’s hair is white, and she hates and fears every technological advance, every change in the mores of the society she once understood. And my father is frail, stooped, marked by brushes with death. I won’t have them for long. I feel like I’ve already lost them.


deborah grabien - Nov 28, 2004 7:38:44 am PST #8271 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.

Tep, a suggestion for a future theme: first reactions.


Pix - Nov 28, 2004 9:15:06 am PST #8272 of 10001
We're all getting played with, babe. -Weird Barbie

I love love love love these drabbles. Also, they hurt.


Pix - Nov 28, 2004 9:35:55 am PST #8273 of 10001
We're all getting played with, babe. -Weird Barbie

Liese, in your drabble, I love the repetition. I also love this line:

We sit on the couch, grinning uselessly. Our eyes are open, but we cannot see what you can, our future.

Tep, you so covered what happens when we confront a younger love. There is one man from my past who would reduce me to 20 in a flat second if I saw him again. I hate that he has that power.

dcp, how interesting to revisit an old home that has been reclaimed for a new use. Have we done a drabble about "coming home"? If not, Tep, could you mark that to use at some point? I also love Deb's "first reactions" suggestion.

Susan, of all the drabbles, yours hits me the hardest. I feel the same way about my own parents--that disconnect between how I still see them and how they are. Your last two lines especially hit me.


§ ita § - Nov 28, 2004 9:45:11 am PST #8274 of 10001
Well not canonically, no, but this is transformative fiction.

She watches the phone ring. If it's him, she'll be old. He freezes her in the headlights of his assumptions, tries to wedge her into the portrait that was a bad likeness even back then.

She'll feel old because it's so much more of a bad fit now than she was then. And because she doesn't have the childish enthusiasm and curiosity to overlook being misjudged. Whoever she is now is stiff and resentful.

She doesn't miss him. She doesn't even miss what they had, fun as it was. She misses the flexibility and the potential of fifteen years ago.


Pix - Nov 28, 2004 9:46:37 am PST #8275 of 10001
We're all getting played with, babe. -Weird Barbie

He freezes her in the headlights of his assumptions, tries to wedge her into the portrait that was a bad likeness even back then.

This line is fabulous, ita.


dcp - Nov 28, 2004 10:25:51 am PST #8276 of 10001
The more I learn, the more I realize how little I know.

Kristin, it was more weird than I could really get across in 100 words, but I posted the drabble anyway. The house was originally built in about 1910, so it was already old and noisy when we lived there in the early '70s. I was in the area in June of 2003 and just meant to drive by the old house, but when I saw that it was now an office building I decided to see if I could get a tour. I don't think I would have had the courage to knock on the door if it had still been a residence. I found that the things I notice about "what makes a good house" are very different now than when I was ten.

I left out the lines about my memories of the dark dirty cellar with the evil scary boiler that fed the steam radiators in each room. The radiators are still there, but are reduced to being decorative. They use a heat pump in the winter now. All that is left of that whole section is the line about the air conditioning.

That brings up a general question for all the drabblers. Who tends to start with a few key thoughts and expand from there? Who likes to write it all out, and then prune to 100 words? Who can do both?


Pix - Nov 28, 2004 10:32:22 am PST #8277 of 10001
We're all getting played with, babe. -Weird Barbie

I almost always have to prune, though I tend to do so pretty quickly. I find the 100 word rule keeps me crisp and forces me to really figure out what's important.


erikaj - Nov 28, 2004 10:57:44 am PST #8278 of 10001
Always Anti-fascist!

I never count...obnoxious, huh?ETA: Thought of y'all as I'm sitting here researching the whole murder thing...there are a shocking number of bands named "Blunt Force Trauma" And an intern keeping a blog from an M.E.'s office whom I would invite to be in our plural marriage if it didn't look like it was an old blog.