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Pretty cool except for the part where I was really terrified and now my knees are all dizzy.
Willow ,'Never Leave Me'
The Great Write Way
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Steph L. - Oct 21, 2004 8:38:16 am PDT #7621 of 10001
I look more rad than Lutheranism
deborah grabien - Oct 21, 2004 8:42:28 am PDT #7622 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Of course, it's also basically the Bush family anthem:
Well, I went home with the waitress
The way I always do
How was I to know
She was with the Russians, too
I was gambling in Havana
I took a little risk
Send lawyers, guns and money
Dad, get me out of this!
I'm the innocent bystander
Somehow I got stuck
Between the rock and the hard place
And I'm down on my luck
And I'm down on my luck
And I'm down on my luck
Now I'm hiding in Honduras
I'm a desperate man
Send lawyers, guns and money
The shit has hit the fan
Send lawyers, guns and money...
BTW, in conversation with Roz Kaveney on the phone yesterday, she informs me that there is an episode of Farscape (never seen the show) that I am now commanded to see, if possible. Something about a character hallucinating that all the other characters are Looney Toon characters?
Katie M - Oct 21, 2004 8:43:56 am PDT #7623 of 10001
I was charmed (albeit somewhat perplexed) by the fannish sensibility of many of the music choices -- it's like the director was trying to vid Canada. --loligo on the Olympic Opening Ceremonies
Revenging Angel, I think. (The Farscape episode in question, I mean.)
Beverly - Oct 21, 2004 8:47:20 am PDT #7624 of 10001
Days shrink and grow cold, sunlight through leaves is my song. Winter is long.
It's a great ep, Deb, but without a working knowledge of the characters as they usually are, I don't think you're going to find it very enjoyable. I could be wrong, of course.
deborah grabien - Oct 21, 2004 8:47:56 am PDT #7625 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
(writing down title)
Thanks, Katie. If anyone hears about it being shown, can they ping me?
Susan W. - Oct 21, 2004 8:57:09 am PDT #7626 of 10001
Good Trouble and Righteous Fights
Today is my freelancing day, and I'm working on a personal experience essay to submit to one of the local parenting magazines. Here's my lead paragraph:
The worst moment so far of my life as a parent came when my daughter was ten days old. At a routine pediatrician visit, we discovered that not only had Annabel not yet begun to regain her birth weight, her weight was still slipping slowly downward from where it had been a few days after birth. It wasn’t yet an emergency, but it was a crisis.
I really, really don't like the second sentence, but I can't figure out a way to make it pithier or break it up. Thoughts?
Betsy HP - Oct 21, 2004 8:58:37 am PDT #7627 of 10001
If I only had a brain...
Too many words. You're burying the lead.
It was the eight-week well-baby check. Annabel hadn't begun regaining her birth weight; far from it, she was continuing to lose weight.
Susan W. - Oct 21, 2004 9:08:34 am PDT #7628 of 10001
Good Trouble and Righteous Fights
Thanks! How 'bout this way?
We were at our second well-baby checkup. Annabel hadn't begun regaining her birth weight; far from it, she was still losing weight.
deborah grabien - Oct 21, 2004 9:10:46 am PDT #7629 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Yep, Betsy nailed it. But the change is nice and tight.
Susan W. - Oct 21, 2004 9:12:28 am PDT #7630 of 10001
Good Trouble and Righteous Fights
I knew it was wordy, but I can't always see how to fix it, especially when I'm trying to switch from my naturally verbose style to nice pithy consumer magazine prose.