Nilly, thessaly composes found poems from googling a word or phrase. The way in which you composed your fateful encounter drabble puts me in mind of that. Beautiful.
Kristin, that's really something else. I'm too full of gronk to go on, except to say the same line that struck Nilly also struck me.
erika, your drabble made me cry, and not in the 'poor thing' way, either. I'm not sure why, actually. I think maybe it's because I lost two childhood friends (brothers) to hemophilia. Well, actually, I lost them to AIDS related illness, but...well...anyhow, crying now. Also? Need more coffee. Also? Don't want to take Christopher to Story Time at the library today, but I really should.
I wish we could've gotten together more...fought crime.
"He's a litigator with a clotting disorder. She's a brain-damaged journalism student with delusions of grandeur. But together they fight corporate crime."
You know, for those people that don't think Batman & Robin are fucked-up enough.
Thanks. Right back atcha.
Rassenfrassen outdated antiquated dictionary! Mine, I mean.
Actually, though, upon rereading, I think I may use your spelling anyway; it sets up a nice parallel with the next line (coincidentally/accidentally).
What was that rule about "as soon as you see it in print, you'll want to change something right away"? Argh.
I think I may use your spelling anyway; it sets up a nice parallel with the next line (coincidentally/accidentally).
I thought you had chosen the first spelling to purposely make the speaker/narrator sound less sophisticated. It certainly did to my ear.
I'm torn on the stanza thing. I think the split where you had it makes sense, and kind of divides the poem into two worlds, gives an explicit separation, but it works as one stanza as well.
Did I mention I thought it was powerful and good?
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Actually, though, upon rereading, I think I may use your spelling anyway; it sets up a nice parallel with the next line (coincidentally/accidentally).
That's what I would have suggested, for that reason, had I chosen to point it out.
Bob Dylan, Bruce Springsteen, several others
Oooh! Happy sigh. Imagine the story you could write for "Thunder Road". Or "Tenth Avenue Freeze-Out". Or "Jungleland". Or so many, many others. And I bet you could get a great story out of "Tangled Up in Blue".
Hey, Teppy, (and Deb, actually) if it's not stepping on toes, maybe a future drabble could be inspired by a song title? Or just a song?
"Hungry Heart" You could go all kinds of places with that one.
"He's a litigator with a clotting disorder. She's a brain-damaged journalism student with delusions of grandeur. But together they fight corporate crime." You know, for those people that don't think Batman & Robin are fucked-up enough.
I love my internet wife. Love love love.
Also, love the song title drabble idea. I have the feeling my head would explode, in a very good way.
Nilly, that was damned close to perfection, and was all the way wonderful.
