I get the feeling it's more about getting the poets to buy the inevitable anthology than it is about talent--but I'm still happy.
What contest is it? Not all of them are as bad as all that.
Anybody can be a prop class clown.
Xander ,'Touched'
The Great Write Way
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victor infante - Oct 19, 2004 4:30:49 pm PDT #7557 of 10001
To understand what happened at the diner, we shall use Mr. Papaya! This is upsetting because he's the friendliest of fruits.
Pix - Oct 19, 2004 4:31:38 pm PDT #7558 of 10001
We're all getting played with, babe. -Weird Barbie
Thanks. I'm terribly self-conscious about my poetry in a way I'm not about my prose. It's nice to get a little affirmation.
I took out the stanzas because they had in the proof they sent me, and I looked at both versions and decided I like it as one stanza instead. What do you think?
Pix - Oct 19, 2004 4:31:43 pm PDT #7559 of 10001
We're all getting played with, babe. -Weird Barbie
Polter-Cow - Oct 19, 2004 7:01:01 pm PDT #7560 of 10001
What else besides ramen can you scoop? YOU CAN SCOOP THIS WORLD FROM DARKNESS!
that first line should have a lowercase i, but quick-edit won't let me.
For future reference, you can foil the quick-edit by starting your line with a dummy tag like t /i .
And that's a nice poem, Kristin. It sets up a really cool image, not so much visual but mental and situational. It's simple and to the point.
§ ita § - Oct 19, 2004 7:07:50 pm PDT #7561 of 10001
Well not canonically, no, but this is transformative fiction.
Simpler way to fool it is to put a space before the lower case i starting the line.
Pix - Oct 19, 2004 7:24:09 pm PDT #7562 of 10001
We're all getting played with, babe. -Weird Barbie
fixed. thanks
Beverly - Oct 19, 2004 7:32:29 pm PDT #7563 of 10001
Days shrink and grow cold, sunlight through leaves is my song. Winter is long.
Kristin, that is a truthful poem, and one with power. Thanks for sharing it.
(Also? Coincidentally is misspelled.)
Pix - Oct 19, 2004 7:41:55 pm PDT #7564 of 10001
We're all getting played with, babe. -Weird Barbie
Bev, thanks. I just double-checked, though, and it looks like actually either spelling is considered correct.
Beverly - Oct 19, 2004 7:53:34 pm PDT #7565 of 10001
Days shrink and grow cold, sunlight through leaves is my song. Winter is long.
Rassenfrassen outdated antiquated dictionary! Mine, I mean.
§ ita § - Oct 19, 2004 8:55:36 pm PDT #7566 of 10001
Well not canonically, no, but this is transformative fiction.
It was, for want of a better word, Monday. It came upon her with no warning, if you didn't count the utter Sundayness of the day before. Which she didn't. It was Monday in her every gesture - the choice of too-awkward shoes (but they matched the skirt), the loose fastening of her travel mug lid (the coffee wasn't that hot anymore), and the fumbling for the cellphone as she ran down her steps.
She slammed into him much as the day had hit her, unavoidably.
"2C, right? Blue Honda Accord?" The coffee dripped from his face onto a ruined shirt.