Cindy, I like this muchly, especially guessing what the "it" is.
How important could it could it be?I think this is a typo.
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Lee - Oct 05, 2004 6:10:30 am PDT #6995 of 10001
The feeling you get when your brain finally lets your heart get in its pants.
Topic!Cindy - Oct 05, 2004 8:26:05 am PDT #6996 of 10001
What is even happening?
Thanks, Lee, and thanks for the typo catch, too. I made a slight change to keep the word count at 100.
deborah grabien - Oct 05, 2004 11:39:34 am PDT #6997 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Cindy, I'm with Lee - nicely written, and the curiosity factor makes it even better.
Susan W. - Oct 05, 2004 8:09:43 pm PDT #6998 of 10001
Good Trouble and Righteous Fights
Anyone want to read some stuff I'm planning to enter in a contest? It's a first kiss contest, with the final round judge an editor from a publisher I'd love to work with. You enter a one-page set-up, plus a first kiss scene of no more than ten pages. The set-up is the hardest part. It's not actually judged, but it needs to introduce what's going on, and I'm sure the better it is and the more compelling you make the characters sound, the better off you are. I'm not at all satisfied with what I've got so far.
Anyway, can I get a couple of beta readers to look at the set-ups and then the scenes themselves?
deborah grabien - Oct 05, 2004 9:54:30 pm PDT #6999 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Yup. Send. But I'm mildly time-crunched for the next couple of days - what's the deadline?
Susan W. - Oct 05, 2004 10:20:43 pm PDT #7000 of 10001
Good Trouble and Righteous Fights
No great rush. Entries have to be received by 11/1, and I'm shooting to mail mine by 10/18 just to avoid that rushed scrambly feeling. I'll insend and then head for sleep.
lisah - Oct 06, 2004 6:18:30 am PDT #7001 of 10001
Punishingly Intricate
Susan, I realize I don't have a track record as a beta reader here but I've really enjoyed the bits of your work you have posted and would love to help you out.
My profile address is good.
Amy - Oct 06, 2004 6:24:51 am PDT #7002 of 10001
Because books.
Susan, I'd be happy to read it. You can send it to either address. You want the most feedback on the setup page, yes?
Susan W. - Oct 06, 2004 6:51:38 am PDT #7003 of 10001
Good Trouble and Righteous Fights
Insent, AmyLiz and lisah. I'm not sure I want the most feedback on the setup page, just more than one measly page would normally get!
After that 45-second pitch experience, I never thought it would be so hard to do a one-page setup of less than half (in Anna's case, a whole lot less than half) of a novel. But it is, especially since you have to do the character and conflict stuff you'd put in a pitch, plus enough setting and backstory that the reader will know where the hell they are when they start reading the scene itself.
Amy - Oct 06, 2004 7:02:59 am PDT #7004 of 10001
Because books.
Sorry, Susan -- I was reading with one eye and watching the baby attack the video cabinet with the other and assumed this was from Lucy, and therefore the kiss scene I'd already read. But it's Anna, so a new kiss. Yay!
Smacking forehead... And I just read the email and saw it's both books. Cool.