And almost sixty-five percent of that was actual compliment. Is that a personal best?

Xander ,'End of Days'


The Great Write Way  

A place for Buffistas to discuss, beta and otherwise deal and dish on their non-fan fiction projects.


§ ita § - Sep 07, 2004 2:29:30 pm PDT #6427 of 10001
Well not canonically, no, but this is transformative fiction.

Sometimes it's him. Or not him. But it's about him, and the silence is his fault, or her fault, if she did something wrong, was too needy, not beautiful enough, not kind, warm, as funny as other girls.

Sometimes she likes quiet. No books overdue, no bills, no one trying to contract her for more.

She thinks, every now and again, right now, no one wants to say her mother's dead, or that she's won a million dollars, no one's saying they love her, need her, or will never speak to her again.

Sometimes she watches it not ring.


deborah grabien - Sep 07, 2004 2:36:08 pm PDT #6428 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.

ita, that's gorgeous, but it's missing a word or two:

"no one is wants to tell her mother's dead"

tell her her mother's dead? tell her that her mother's dead?


Susan W. - Sep 07, 2004 2:37:54 pm PDT #6429 of 10001
Good Trouble and Righteous Fights

The Catholic church a few blocks from our house rings its bells on the hour. They’re soft. I only hear them if I’m outside and the wind is just so. They mark time, but not as I do. The bells aren’t in a hurry. They sanctify the meeting of the eternal and the now, while I measure my life in items crossed off a to-do list. Sometimes when I hear them I pause and think how I must enjoy the now, give thanks for the gifts of late summer and a baby girl’s smile. But it’s only for the moment, and then I am myself again.


§ ita § - Sep 07, 2004 2:39:22 pm PDT #6430 of 10001
Well not canonically, no, but this is transformative fiction.

Thanks for the catch, deb. I switched verbs, and left pronouns flapping in the wind.


deborah grabien - Sep 07, 2004 2:42:03 pm PDT #6431 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.

Susan, that's a lovely piece. Very contemplative.

I switched verbs, and left pronouns flapping in the wind.

I do that constantly, in short pieces. Not certain why.


DebetEsse - Sep 07, 2004 3:28:55 pm PDT #6432 of 10001
Woe to the fucking wicked.

First-ever drabble, so be gentle. It feels a little like I'm missing a piece, but I'm not sure if that's just me, or how to fix that, if not.

My brother plays handbells at church. He joins in Dad's drama camps even though he's only in eighth grade. He has friends over to the house on Saturdays. He made new friends when he changed schools. He's made friends everywhere he went since he was born.

He's a teenager now, and doesn't want to be in the church choir this year. He'll probably stop being in the band next year, when he goes to high school. He's started opting out of some things, sometimes.

But my little brother, the one who joins in with the group, plays handbells.


Steph L. - Sep 07, 2004 3:48:53 pm PDT #6433 of 10001
I look more rad than Lutheranism

Okay, this isn't *about* bells, but it incorporates them....

MEMO
Re: S. Claus makeover

Our client, Mr. Claus, has come to us with a problem. His primary goal -- slipping in, leaving presents, and slipping back out unnoticed -- is fraught with possibilities for discovery. In this day and age of high-tech surveillance equipment and nannycams, the odds of the Jolly Elf being caught in the act are greater than ever. To minimize that risk, we recommend the following:

* eliminate jingle bells, as they create too much noise
* limit self to one "ho ho ho!" per house (see above, re: noise)
* trade reindeer for stealth bomber, as reindeer on a rooftop are unusual and will attract undue attention; also run the risk of leaving behind tell-tale Holiday Dung
* lose weight; people remember a man of his size more easily (also, less likely to get stuck in chimney if thinner)
* change costume from bright red velvet trimmed with white fur to something in a matte black or charcoal grey, possibly in a jersey or gabardine; think ninja, not Liberace

To sum up: less jolly, more stealth = a risk-free holiday season for our client.


sumi - Sep 07, 2004 3:49:54 pm PDT #6434 of 10001
Art Crawl!!!

Bwah!


Gris - Sep 07, 2004 3:51:00 pm PDT #6435 of 10001
Hey. New board.

DebetEsse: I like it. A Circle of Siblings sort of thing. Watching kids grow up and out of their older selves is always so interesting.

Teppy: Bwah!


Pix - Sep 07, 2004 3:58:54 pm PDT #6436 of 10001
The status is NOT quo.

Debet! I like it, and I'm thrilled you're starting to post here.

Teppy just made me startle my cat with loud laughter.