Heh. Very nicely done, Sophie, if a bit long for a straight drabble.
Astarte, backflung twice, bebe, and to Anne and Bev as well. I did a small change that I think makes a metric fuckload of difference. Will send.
Fred: Oh my God! Angel, you're…cute! Angel: Fred, don't! Fred: Oh, but the little hands! And the hair! Angel: Hey! You're fired.
'Smile Time'
The Great Write Way
A place for Buffistas to discuss, beta and otherwise deal and dish on their non-fan fiction projects.
deborah grabien - Aug 15, 2004 11:49:21 am PDT #6061 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Sophie Max - Aug 15, 2004 11:59:42 am PDT #6062 of 10001
thanks guys!
I edited to shorten it up. I'm not sure, but I think that does make it better. This drabbling is good writing exercise of exactly the kind I need - I tend to blather without much discipline.
off to do some office type work. thanks!
Deena - Aug 15, 2004 2:15:29 pm PDT #6063 of 10001
How are you me? You need to stop that. Only I can be me. ~Kara
Anyone available to read a 631 word article on background screening for me? It's due tomorrow and I'm not sure I hit all the salient points with the humor the client's hoping for.
eta: Too tired to wait for a response. I'm just going to hope it's good enough. Night everyone.
Liese S. - Aug 15, 2004 8:52:57 pm PDT #6064 of 10001
"Faded like the lilac, he thought."
Bombies
It’s not that there still isn’t clean water. Or that there are no jobs. It’s not that her aunt and uncle cannot work their farm.
It’s not that her brother was killed in the street in front of her house. Or that her father was, thirteen years ago. Or that her niece is dying even now, for lack of simple antibiotics.
It’s that every night she sleeps under a wall embedded with an unexploded bomblet. She watches it with exhausted eyes until she cannot keep awake. And closes her eyes to the death that sleeps above her, one more night.
deborah grabien - Aug 15, 2004 10:12:44 pm PDT #6065 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Jesus, Liese.
One question, though - can "hence" be past tense?
Liese S. - Aug 16, 2004 6:08:49 pm PDT #6066 of 10001
"Faded like the lilac, he thought."
Huh. I dunno. Merriam Webster says no. So I wonder what I mean. I'll just make it "ago" I think.
deborah grabien - Aug 16, 2004 7:01:11 pm PDT #6067 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
That's what I thought - "hence" is future tense. Works nicely with "ago", though, the drabble does. It's insanely powerful.
I have a completed MS of "Matty Groves" at Kinkos, being copied. Tomorrow, it goes to agent. Go me!
Liese S. - Aug 16, 2004 7:50:20 pm PDT #6068 of 10001
"Faded like the lilac, he thought."
Thanks. This is the drabble I've been trying to write since the damn thing launched. Every topic I've looked at an angle to write it from. Didn't come out until Sunday.
Go you! Yay for Matty Groves! Yay for beating deadlines! Yay for Kinko's! Yay for you!
deborah grabien - Aug 16, 2004 7:53:23 pm PDT #6069 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Next up: my "what feeds on vampires?" novel. Good to be working with a science writer, since I now have the hard science I need for it.
Liese S. - Aug 16, 2004 8:07:13 pm PDT #6070 of 10001
"Faded like the lilac, he thought."
So fun. And a change of pace for you, too, eh?