(fruit. I could go on forever)
My mother mastered a delicious apple pie during my childhood in Jamaica. Always critical of her talents, she tried to downplay the pastry. But it flaked, and was buttery, all the things I demand of a crust to this day. The juicy, tender filling was why you came to the table, though. Tart, sweet, with just enough resistance to your bite.
It took me years to find an apple pie made with real apples that could compete with her juice soaked chayote concoction.
So often the fables we spin of the first world grow harsh and thin in direct light.
My god, ita. You're just all about the sensory, aren't you? Your drabbles bring it, scent and the quality of light, the weight of sun on the skin, dust on a child's bare feet. They're marvelous.
connie, yours about the berries...about the ripe one after the others.
You're all making me hungry.
Backsent, bebe. I'll curl up with it later today, if that's OK. I do have some suggestions for trimming, largely stylistic.
Jeffrey Dahmer:
I'm finding myself wishing that my creativity was a bit less like Cordy's visions...Ok, it doesn't hurt, but writing something always kind of starts off like "I see a girl and she's in trouble," as opposed to "I'm gonna write about (thing) (Thing) (Thing) Is that something a person learns, or is it something to do with the way I think? Will practice help?
erika, I'm not sure why it would be a problem, unless you think you're not an "organic" writer by nature. I mean, the story can flow from the original picture in your head; where it gets tricky is if you have trouble seeing the connections between said character's point A to point B, point B to point C, etc.
I guess that is the problem that the Cordy seeing the vision doesn't really have a Wesley to say "Then what happens?"(And pardon my pathetic metaphor) But I do have some trouble connecting my dots, yeah.
Have you tried sitting down, focusing on the image, and then freewriting for several minutes? It's amazing how much your subconscious will make up when you force it to.
P-C's suggestion is a good one. I also rec drabbling these days, to sort out a scene or a connection.
