Is it OK if I go ahead and send you the first chapter? It's something I essentially rewrote from scratch over the last month--the novel has been finished since September, but I got some comments on pacing problems, and when I went back and looked, it was obvious the opening was way too long and leisurely. I've got it trimmed to the point the hero and heroine now meet on page 25 in Ch. 2 rather than page 64 in Ch. 4, but now I'm worried that it's too abrupt, too much info all at once.
It's all about choices, Faith. The ones we make, and the ones we don't. Oh, and the consequences. Those are always fun.
Angelus ,'Smile Time'
The Great Write Way
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Susan W. - May 28, 2004 12:11:47 pm PDT #4873 of 10001
Good Trouble and Righteous Fights
Amy - May 28, 2004 12:27:33 pm PDT #4874 of 10001
Because books.
Go right ahead! If you send it tonight (or by early tomorrow EST), I can print it out and read it this weekend on the car trip, or while up at the in-laws.
Susan W. - May 28, 2004 1:30:49 pm PDT #4875 of 10001
Good Trouble and Righteous Fights
Insent, AmyLiz.
Amy - May 28, 2004 1:47:00 pm PDT #4876 of 10001
Because books.
Got it, Susan! I probably won't send comments till Tuesday, though, because I'll be computerless at the in-laws', and I have a pile of laundry and packing to do tonight. Okay?
Susan W. - May 28, 2004 1:51:08 pm PDT #4877 of 10001
Good Trouble and Righteous Fights
Sure! Have a great trip.
Liese S. - May 28, 2004 10:53:55 pm PDT #4878 of 10001
"Faded like the lilac, he thought."
Oh, Susan! Btw, I've not forgotten you. I'll have to email you re: freelance, but probably not until next week. I'm sorry, it's been crazy. I think we're going to still do something, but we'll at least pay you for what you've done up till now. And with that tidbit, I've got to try to sleep.
Polter-Cow - May 29, 2004 10:46:46 am PDT #4879 of 10001
What else besides ramen can you scoop? YOU CAN SCOOP THIS WORLD FROM DARKNESS!
I haven't drabbled in a while, but everyone's written such depressing ones I felt I had to lighten the mood:
Being dead isn’t all it’s cracked up to be. You always think your astral body will get the hell up as soon as it’s not needed, but no. I’m stuck here on the damn floor with a—is that a fork? Did she kill me with a fucking fork? Christ.
She’s calling the police now, I think. She should report a murder! That would be ironic. There’s no blood in her hair. God, she’s hot. Why are the pretty ones always insane? Oh, she’s coming back now and bending—hey! Hey! Don’t close the eyes! Shit. Now I can’t see.
erikaj - May 29, 2004 10:49:21 am PDT #4880 of 10001
Always Anti-fascist!
Good one. Bwah.
deborah grabien - May 29, 2004 10:49:31 am PDT #4881 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
buhWAH!
That's a honey, P-C.
deborah grabien - May 29, 2004 11:01:24 am PDT #4882 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Variations on an earlier theme, one I did for "knots". Adults only.
Game, Redux
"Let me up."
"No way, honey. Not for a while yet."
He's not touching her. He's just looking at her, circling the bed. He's got every weapon, every advantage: she's naked, he's not. She's bound, he's free. Most of all, she agreed to this.
She wants to squirm, and there's no defense against those eyes of his. No squirming, she tells herself. He doesn't need an extra advantage.
"Let me up." She tries to bite back the words. It seems she can't. Damn it. Damn it.
"No." He circles the bed. "Not yet. I like you just where you are."