go back and insert a few little bits in "Matty", pointing to echoes that later become louder
deb, I'm actually in the middle of reading it pretty much right now, so if I can offer any help, I'd love to.
Spike: Heard what happened up top, offing your dad and all. Don't know if you know this, but, uh…I killed my mum. Actually, I'd already killed her, and then she tried to shag me, so I had to-- Wesley: Thank you. I'm…very comforted.
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Nilly - Jan 25, 2004 1:14:24 am PST #3247 of 10001
Swouncing
deborah grabien - Jan 25, 2004 8:09:57 am PST #3248 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Woof. OK - I did some work yesterday, and added those bits. Want me to send, with explanations?
Actually, I'll just send. WIth explanations. Not awake yet.
deborah grabien - Jan 26, 2004 6:26:12 pm PST #3249 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
HELP.
Any of my beloved beta readers around? I spurted and this is new and spooky (not ghosty, just spooky, I think) and I need a beta...
Deena - Jan 26, 2004 6:26:59 pm PST #3250 of 10001
How are you me? You need to stop that. Only I can be me. ~Kara
Deb, I'm here. Shoot it over.
Holli - Jan 26, 2004 6:30:45 pm PST #3251 of 10001
an overblown libretto and a sumptuous score/ could never contain the contradictions I adore
Deb, are you on AIM?
deborah grabien - Jan 26, 2004 6:51:07 pm PST #3252 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Deena, insending.
Holli, I am now...
Deena - Jan 26, 2004 7:08:55 pm PST #3253 of 10001
How are you me? You need to stop that. Only I can be me. ~Kara
And returned, Deb.
Susan W. - Jan 26, 2004 7:21:55 pm PST #3254 of 10001
Good Trouble and Righteous Fights
Today my writers group told me the scene from Anna I brought it was "very visual." That's a first, and something of a triumph. Problem is, it doesn't yet feel like an organic part of my writing. I think, "Oh yeah, there's that visual description thing my betas always say I lack. Should try to put something in. Let's see, what would my POV character be noticing? That the stuffed-shirt lieutenant who'll eventually be the villain of the piece is practically the only person left in the unit wearing a completely regulation uniform, with shiny silver buttons and well-polished boots. OK, I'll describe that, and contrast it to Mr. POV's rather frayed jacket and the boots he looted off a French corpse." And apparently it works, but I have to think about it hard. Dialogue is by far the most natural kind of writing for me, and I can't figure out why, since I'm rather introverted and hardly a witty conversationalist.
Liese S. - Jan 26, 2004 7:31:46 pm PST #3255 of 10001
"Faded like the lilac, he thought."
That's interesting, Susan. I think I'm the opposite, because of the time I spent writing text rpgs, where it's all sensual and the players fill in all the dialogue. I notice that my most recent piece is all description and action and introverted What They Feeeel, and very little actual conversation.
deborah grabien - Jan 26, 2004 7:45:54 pm PST #3256 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
I like it balanced, but you have to go with the requirements of the scene, I think.