cereal:
My professor thought I was taking notes in class. But instead I was writing this poem! See if you can guess its cunningly-concealed trick. And then tell me if it's annoying.
UNTITLED POEM: TWO WORDS
I.
Stripping away yr skin I am
Touching the soft parts exposed to air. I'm not
Interested in the pattern of questions, the sad weight
Notched against my back. Not considering an ending. Not
Getting away with this yet.
II.
Stay with this. Trail a finger down
The long curve of a spine, a shoulderblade.
Ringing it loose. Tucking away. Romancing the breath
In the space between the legs of the clock. One last second,
Nettles tangling out of, sweep it away.
Gobbling at you like some goddamned bird.
No, not yet, but I'll look again. And insent, Lizard.
Okay. I'm not at home right now, and consequently I have no FTP access; it'll happen as soon as I get home tonight, all right?
Not a problem. It's been hiding since I knew Buffistas, one more day= no big. Although you and I go back a bit, to MWT etc.Thanks again.
See if you can guess its cunningly-concealed trick.
STING, STRING - you're playing the Elizabethan first letter code thingie game.
I got it, I got it too! Only because Hec got it first you'll just have to trust me.
Hey Erica, this might seem incredibly petty and nitpicky, but your story has a number of missing
spaces.
Like in this bit:
Your movements in the kitchen are both slow and deliberate.Katie takes this as a struggle;most able-bodied people do, in your experience.
there's no space between "deliberate." and "Katie", or between "struggle;" and "most". Maybe it's to do with your computer problems, but I just thought I'd mention it because I couldn't help being a little distracted by it.
It's now up at [link] (give me a moment to finish downloading the new Telnet client so I can reset the stupid permissions thingie so yis all can view it.) erika, I really hope you don't mind, I took the liberty of putting those spaces where they should have been, hit me if I shouldn't have? It seemed like a nice idea the time. I'll change it back if you care, I still have the original.
cereal:
you're playing the Elizabethan first letter code thingie game.
These days, darling, we call them acrostics.
Very clever, Lizard- I like it.
Erica- I've put your story on my 'to read' list, and I'll get to it in a day or two, at which point I'll try and give you some feedback, hopefully helpful.
