Steph, those are fabulous, and I have a particular ganglia-moving reaction to "SWEET". My father lost a leg to gangrene (diabetes, wrong medicine given) and that last line twisted a bit. Powerful, and wow. Well done.
I tell you I have this theory. It goes where, you're the one who's not my sister. Cuz mom adopted you from a shoe box full of baby howler monkeys, and never told you cuz it could hurt your delicate baby feelings.
Dawn ,'Selfless'
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deborah grabien - Apr 13, 2003 10:55:58 pm PDT #1147 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Steph L. - Apr 13, 2003 10:59:03 pm PDT #1148 of 10001
Unusually and exceedingly peculiar and altogether quite impossible to describe
Thanks, Deb! Your opinion means a lot to me. My small group liked them, too. I've been very unsure about them, because it's the first time I've tried this form; for that matter, it's the first time I've tried -- and *finished* -- any structured poem form (i.e., sestina, villanelle, pantoum).
deborah grabien - Apr 13, 2003 11:02:29 pm PDT #1149 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Honey, they breathe. And I can pay no higher compliment to poetry; you can feel the tickle against the nape of the neck, sometimes it's light, sometimes it's hurricane (Michael Drayton is like that for me, "....shake hands forever...") but damn, they breathe.
Steph L. - Apr 13, 2003 11:04:02 pm PDT #1150 of 10001
Unusually and exceedingly peculiar and altogether quite impossible to describe
Really, thank you SO much.
And now I go to bed; I'm working tomorrow as long as my pain level is decent. Surgery Tuesday, and then the parts need to heal.
I hope to get some good writing done with my time off; certainly not the first week, when I'll be very drugged, but I hope the second week will be less drug-intensive, so I can do some writing.
deborah grabien - Apr 13, 2003 11:11:18 pm PDT #1151 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Hell, my generation claims to have done most of its writing while drugged.
You go sleep, girly. Soon the back will be back to normal.
David J. Schwartz - Apr 13, 2003 11:13:30 pm PDT #1152 of 10001
New, fully poseable Author!Knut.
Steph, lovely work, especially the second.
Steph L. - Apr 13, 2003 11:16:59 pm PDT #1153 of 10001
Unusually and exceedingly peculiar and altogether quite impossible to describe
Thanks, Knut! I admit the first was just a fun little one, although I really like it. It's got some substance in it, but also a lot of fun, whereas the second one is all a bunch of tangle-y feelings.
Theodosia - Apr 14, 2003 6:12:07 am PDT #1154 of 10001
'we all walk this earth feeling we are frauds. The trick is to be grateful and hope the caper doesn't end any time soon"
Wow!
erikaj - Apr 14, 2003 12:37:00 pm PDT #1155 of 10001
Always Anti-fascist!
I think I like the first better, but they are both great.I've only written structured poems for classes, and they were nothing to write home about. What makes an acrostic?
Steph L. - Apr 14, 2003 12:43:44 pm PDT #1156 of 10001
Unusually and exceedingly peculiar and altogether quite impossible to describe
erika, an acrostic is where the first letter of each line spells a word, if you read it down.
Like this
Curled up in the window, yet
Alert to all the birds
That fly past.
See?