Well, I guess it could be worse -- say, gone to print without your input. I'm glad you're getting to fix it, even though I'm sure it's a hell job.

Ms. H. I thought about your suggestions and I think I've improved the way the speaker takes control of the girl.

Kudos also to Am-Chau who noticed that I used the word small a lot. I believe it was 13 times, actually. I fixed those too and I added a few details to flesh out some visuals.

It's final, I swear, and posted in my LJ.

I'm rabbiting around for another idea so I don't try to fix again. I may try to edit some old things and see what I can make of them if I don't get a new idea soon.

Deb, if you happen to check in here before checking your email, I sent comments to you.

Anne, Deena, I loves you both with intense muchliness. Answers tomorrow to comments very gratefully received - I'll be hipdeep in the rest of the Weaver edits, though.

I'm going to have to tone down the feng shui surprise (no one knew about it when the damned book was first written, back in 1992).

Good grief, Deb - how thoroughly hideous! You have my futile, but wholehearted, sympathy.

Um. I was wondering whether it would be appropriate to post my porn anthology piece here? I wrote it way the hell back, maybe a year ago now? When we first had the idea of a short story anthology, anyway. Since that does seem to have gone pear-shaped, it's gathering dust - and as it's the only piece of original fiction I've written, I wondered if it might be worth digging it back out and having a wee look at it. I don't know whether I could make use of it at all. Hmm.

Anyway, would that be an appropriate thing to put here? Or not? It's NC17, natch. As per the remit, it's gothic horror/erotica type stuff - we did have a loose Gay Vampire Snuff Porn theme. Pretentious as hell, needless to say - it's sort of based around Coleridge's poem Christobel, and around Little Red Riding Hood too. Some people have read it already.

Hey Fay, why not post it in the anthology project? I'm actually nervous of posting anything overtly sexual here (though, okay, I did, but it wasn't really overt, was it?)

Huh, could I use the story I just did for the anthology project, do you think?

And no, I realize, because it's not vampirish. Back to the drawing board.

I want to read whatever you wrote, wherever you post it.

I need to finish my anthology story. It never ended up porny, but it's a damned good story.

I focused on the porny and hit a roadblock. I'm going to start over and focus on story and if it gets porny, yay me! Knowing me, it probably will.

I need to finish my anthology story.

I fully intend to start one. Hum.

I'd really like to try and market the thing, too, but I'm not sure how one goes about that other than mailing it out to slush piles.