Okay, now that's fucking depressing.
t beams
I was bemoaning my fate with Viv over Mexican the other night, that I'd locked myself into this with a throw-away line at the end of the Teal'c snippet. And I can't go back, because it was definitely omniscient voice there. Argh.
No retconning, no.
Sigh. What I really want to do is to encourage you to call a mulligan and get around it--give the guy amnesia again and say no no, I meant what happened to him that day! or something--but I cannot in good conscience do that. Oh well.
You could always go the quantum mirror route, I suppose, but that would require rather more plot than I think you're wanting to write.
The voices and characterizations were spot-on.
I don't like the Riley, and Teal'c was never meant to talk this much, but I see why the plot requires it.
Mostly it's their internal stuff that feels off to me. The dialogue's not distracting.
I'm also adoring where the specialities overlap.
He, actually.
Which makes me think about why so many big plotty crossovers are written by guys, and does it have to do with the endless argument about whether the Enterprise would survive a run-in with the Death Star, and so forth...
I had no clue what the hell Jack was doing there, and the future tense kind of threw me off.
It was... ah, that was the one that was the fallout from the episode with the bugs, where Teal'c got bit and was gonna sprout thousands of bugs, right? So her premise was that they didn't find him in time, and he did, and the bugs took over Colorado, and ... I forget. Something about the vampires.
Katie's "In the Wrong Story" totally has the sex scene. In my head.
That's a little weird, right? It's okay. I've accepted it.
In the end, it was the over-paralleling that kicked me out of The Scarab. For now, anyway. The long Riley=Jack apologia is jarring. Especially since I don't see it at all.
I must have skimmed that part, ita. I was mostly reading for plot, which I liked.
The story did suffer from what I tend to think of as First Story Syndrome, where the writer feels the need to hit on all the character's hot topics, so we got references to Teal'c's Sholva status, Charlie's death, Share, and so forth. That got a little old.
But in general, it was an ambitious story that managed to integrate both universes, set up an interesting conflict, hold the suspense, and use just about every character in a way that made sense for them. For that, I'll cut them some slack on imperfect voices and the occasional anvil-thumping.
Suela!
t pounce
There are two open VividCon spots...
You should come! It'll be a party!
Huh.
It's the weekend after next?
Oh, wait. No, I've got SL as a house-guest that week. ...unless I strongarm her into dog-sitting for me...
Errrr.
Plus there's the whole "you're going to Chicago for what? And not visiting our brother while you're there?" Thing.
