Amy, I just went back and reread your two, and they suddenly went PINGPINGPING. Wow. Dark.
Mal: So we run. Nandi: I understand, Captain Reynolds. You have your people to think of, same as me. And this ain't your fight. Mal: Don't believe you do understand, Nandi. I said 'we run'. We.
'Heart Of Gold'
The Great Write Way, Chapter Two: Twice upon a time...
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deborah grabien - Mar 21, 2005 2:49:30 pm PST #721 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Susan W. - Mar 21, 2005 2:56:34 pm PST #722 of 10001
Good Trouble and Righteous Fights
With apologies to Tim O'Brien:
The Things She Carries
Anna carries the clothes on her back, plus one change of dress and two of linen. She carries letters from her brother and her Great-Aunt Sophia, raked into her satchel at the last minute as she prepared to flee. In a little purse she carries coin, Spanish and English, for bribes and tips and better food and beds en route. She carries the horror of having killed a man, accident or no, and the memory of his ruined dead face. And though she won’t realize it for a few days yet, she carries a child, conceived under the stars four weeks ago.
deborah grabien - Mar 21, 2005 3:02:11 pm PST #723 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Susan, that's gorgeous, especially those last two sentences.
One fix: "She carries a letters" Plural? Singular?
Susan W. - Mar 21, 2005 3:05:51 pm PST #724 of 10001
Good Trouble and Righteous Fights
Good catch, Deb. It changed from a letter to letters mid-thought, so that slipped in.
Pix - Mar 21, 2005 3:07:56 pm PST #725 of 10001
We're all getting played with, babe. -Weird Barbie
Oh, so love the Tim O'Brien tribute. I teach that book, and it never fails to make me cry.
Susan W. - Mar 21, 2005 3:09:50 pm PST #726 of 10001
Good Trouble and Righteous Fights
There's an excerpt of it in a writing book on my shelves. I've always loved it, and it's in the "show, don't tell" section, so it seemed appropriate.
I'll have to do one for Jack, too. It'll be both easier and harder, since a straight listing of all the gear he's schlepping around Spain would consume over 100 words by itself.
Connie Neil - Mar 21, 2005 3:13:42 pm PST #727 of 10001
brillig
My little drabble is feeling unloved. t /whiny pouty needy writer
erikaj - Mar 21, 2005 3:17:25 pm PST #728 of 10001
I'm a fucking amazing catch!--Fiona Gallagher, Shameless(US)
It's funny isn't it? The one I slave over, people are "Eh." But something I toss up out of boredom or delirum and people just don't get enough Your secret agent tries to be prepared for everything, Connie. I have no idea what to write.
deborah grabien - Mar 21, 2005 3:30:46 pm PST #729 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
(blinking)
(going back to look)
connie, yours came up last before a flurry of posts, and I didn't even see it.
I like that. Having met the young woman in question, it sketches her out quite nicely, thanks.
Connie Neil - Mar 21, 2005 3:39:22 pm PST #730 of 10001
brillig
Happy whiny needy pouting writer, now.