Haven't you killed me enough for one day?

Mal ,'War Stories'


The Great Write Way, Chapter Two: Twice upon a time...  

A place for Buffistas to discuss, beta and otherwise deal and dish on their non-fan fiction projects.


sj - Mar 08, 2005 5:54:33 pm PST #423 of 10001
"There are few hours in life more agreeable than the hour dedicated to the ceremony known as afternoon tea."

What great drabbles everyone is writing this week.

Sail, your drabble broke me in a good way. Go you!

I love yours, erika. The various meanings of holding are great.

Oooh, Clovis drabble! Great job, Jilli.

Your first drabble is so very sensual, Kristin.

Souls are freed on flaming pyres, and hers is long past due.

Great line, Connie.


sj - Mar 08, 2005 7:09:53 pm PST #424 of 10001
"There are few hours in life more agreeable than the hour dedicated to the ceremony known as afternoon tea."

Here is my drabble:

"I washed my hands and used antibacterial gel." Finally I’m holding my newborn nephew. He has one hand over his pacifier, determined not to let it fall out again; his other hand grabs at anything within reach. Soon he’ll scream for his bottle, but for now I enjoy quiet of the moment and the chance to study him. I watch as he moves his head trying to find the direction of his brother’s voice; the baby is grunting because he cannot yet control his head the way he wants to. I still can’t believe this perfect baby needs heart surgery.


Liese S. - Mar 09, 2005 2:12:08 am PST #425 of 10001
"Faded like the lilac, he thought."

to hold you

I was nineteen, and unafraid of the world. After all, it had you in it. You, much older, drove me where I wanted to go. I loved you, no doubt. Passionately, irrefutably, to spite the universe.

You squirmed, restless, as I held you too tight.

Twenty-nine, I am unafraid of myself. These days I drive, because I prefer it. I loosened my grip when I learned to live on my own. I love you, no less passionately. Now I stretch it out, languorous, like a summer twilight.

You lie content in my arms; I have learned to hold you right.


Pix - Mar 09, 2005 6:40:37 am PST #426 of 10001
We're all getting played with, babe. -Weird Barbie

Oh Liese. I adore that.

I stretch it out, languorous, like a summer twilight.

This especially.


§ ita § - Mar 09, 2005 7:25:37 am PST #427 of 10001
Well not canonically, no, but this is transformative fiction.

She cradles the heavy mug closer to her body, leaning forward to capture more chocolate-scented steam.

It's too hot to drink now, but just the right temperature for the heat to seep through to her always-cold fingers and loosen them of their just-slept stiffness.

She almost prefers this moment to actually drinking. Basking in the pocket of warmth, she's briefly able to look at the snow-covered landscape without resentment or fear. Her memories of being a small bundle in a bright snowsuit become more real than frostbite earned scraping ice from her windshield.

But it's chocolate. It's not for holding.


sumi - Mar 09, 2005 8:00:28 am PST #428 of 10001
Art Crawl!!!

Bwahaha!


Liese S. - Mar 09, 2005 8:31:29 am PST #429 of 10001
"Faded like the lilac, he thought."

Oh! That's great, ita. Nothing like it.


deborah grabien - Mar 09, 2005 9:46:21 am PST #430 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.

Now I want a chantico...


erikaj - Mar 09, 2005 10:03:10 am PST #431 of 10001
Always Anti-fascist!

Deb, despite all the attention I'm trying to get through writing, your meme is making me sweat. Because it still feels unseemly to me to think my stuff is good, or something. Except for ten seconds on the high of writing it, but hey, I'm stoned then.


deborah grabien - Mar 09, 2005 10:08:01 am PST #432 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.

erika, at some point, you're going to have to learn to love your own voice. The voice is there. Don't muffle it - don't bury it.

And sweating is fine, so long as you don't let it drown you, or stop you.