But right now it means I shouldn’t miss you at all. How can I? We’re sharing a breath.
Oh, Jesus, erika.
Now we're saving a vampire from vampires. I got two words for that -- Nuh and uh.
Gunn ,'Underneath'
The Great Write Way, Chapter Two: Twice upon a time...
A place for Buffistas to discuss, beta and otherwise deal and dish on their non-fan fiction projects.
deborah grabien - Jun 14, 2005 10:23:31 am PDT #2726 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
SailAweigh - Jun 14, 2005 10:30:32 am PDT #2727 of 10001
Nana korobi, ya oki. (Fall down seven times, stand up eight.) ~Yuzuru Hanyu/Japanese proverb
Sounds of Silence
I hear the breath rattle in your throat and I know it’s nearly over. The sheets of the hospital bed are tucked up under your chin and around your shoulders. Did they think you were cold when you came out of the operating room? Had the chill crept into your skin, already? Perhaps it was just “standard operating procedure.” I’ve been sitting here, holding my breath, waiting for you to breathe, again. There’s silence in the room as the chill sets in. Please, just one more, I need to breathe. We need to breathe to live. Was that…? Oh, no…
erikaj - Jun 14, 2005 10:34:41 am PDT #2728 of 10001
Always Anti-fascist!
Thanks, Deb. Wow, that was powerful as usual, Sail.
SailAweigh - Jun 14, 2005 10:40:13 am PDT #2729 of 10001
Nana korobi, ya oki. (Fall down seven times, stand up eight.) ~Yuzuru Hanyu/Japanese proverb
Ditto, erika. Your first one hits me quite a bit. My son was born with respiratory distress syndrom and was on oxygen for the first 5 days. He's mildy mentally retarded so I know how important those first breaths are. I would have written about that, but you said it so well.
erikaj - Jun 14, 2005 10:42:27 am PDT #2730 of 10001
Always Anti-fascist!
Thanks. Was afraid it might be a thread-killer, though.
SailAweigh - Jun 14, 2005 10:44:38 am PDT #2731 of 10001
Nana korobi, ya oki. (Fall down seven times, stand up eight.) ~Yuzuru Hanyu/Japanese proverb
Nah. The thread doesn't live on oxygen.
deborah grabien - Jun 14, 2005 11:38:03 am PDT #2732 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
You got that right.
deborah grabien - Jun 14, 2005 11:41:23 am PDT #2733 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Oh, and people reading R&RNF? I just sent out the entire Chapter 14. Another 2000 words.
There looks to be a Chapter 15 and epilogue to come - Bree spills her guts to the cops and John becomes aware that she think's she's failed him - and then, this book?
Done.
Four weeks come Thursday. 28 days.
Aims - Jun 14, 2005 11:45:10 am PDT #2734 of 10001
Shit's all sorts of different now.
Grief and Grieving
The air is dry. Thick. Rancid with lies and hurt. It’s tainted air. I hear him breathe in as I breathe out. As he exhales, I inhale his weakness. Across the phone line; Twenty-five hundred miles apart. Air of deceit, air of loss, air of love. “I play second fiddle to no one. You don’t deserve me.” Air of truth, air of anger, air of finally sticking up for myself. “You’re right”, he says. Air of defeat, air of grief, air of dishonesty finally catching up. “I just can’t love you anymore.” In. Out. We breathe the air of conclusion.
erikaj - Jun 14, 2005 11:49:46 am PDT #2735 of 10001
Always Anti-fascist!
Damn..you could barely have kittens in that time, Deb. Aimee, good one.