His piercing blue eyes penetrated the new mooned night.
whimper
I happen to be very biteable, pal. I'm moist and delicious.
Xander ,'Bring On The Night'
The Great Write Way, Chapter Two: Twice upon a time...
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deborah grabien - May 09, 2005 10:20:56 am PDT #1926 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Astarte - May 09, 2005 10:22:57 am PDT #1927 of 10001
Not having has never been the thing I've regretted most in my life. Not trying is.
Hee. Take that Untoasted Crumpet Girl.
deborah grabien - May 09, 2005 10:24:09 am PDT #1928 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Take that Untoasted Crumpet Girl.
Nothing can defeat the Buttery Untoasted Crumpet of Love!
Astarte - May 09, 2005 10:28:36 am PDT #1929 of 10001
Not having has never been the thing I've regretted most in my life. Not trying is.
Somebody's new moon pierced by blue eyes begs to differ...
deborah grabien - May 09, 2005 10:31:45 am PDT #1930 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Somebody's new moon pierced by blue eyes begs to differ...
pftpftpftph.
Where's your pointless repetition? Where are all the staccato individual words chopped out of perfectly good sentences? Where's your grotesquely overdone use of adverbs, missy?
Huh? Huh?
(although, I actually think my "night" drabble is worse than my "porn" drabble.)
Astarte - May 09, 2005 10:34:55 am PDT #1931 of 10001
Not having has never been the thing I've regretted most in my life. Not trying is.
Hey, I have more practice trying to make my bad writing good than bad writing left whimpering on its own.
I tried the non-linear over metaphored angle meself.
Although, I do bow to the flowery badness that is your Night drabble, in all candor.
deborah grabien - May 09, 2005 10:36:01 am PDT #1932 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Although, I do bow to the flowery badness that is your Night drabble, in all candor.
Thank you! Doesn't it suck?
Man, bad writing on purpose? Hard.
Astarte - May 09, 2005 10:38:13 am PDT #1933 of 10001
Not having has never been the thing I've regretted most in my life. Not trying is.
Sucks like a sucking thing.
Really hard to keep it bad and brief, too. I had some really bad metaphors in there and some more runons, but they made it longer than 100 words.
Discipline is HARD.
deborah grabien - May 09, 2005 10:39:25 am PDT #1934 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Hmmmm.
Having done two overdones, maybe I should try a Hemingway chop-up?
deborah grabien - May 09, 2005 10:44:37 am PDT #1935 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Third one.
Bad Hemingway
The room was dark. Cold. No lightbulb in the fixture. Some asshole took it away. Left me in the dark.
I walked forward. I had to - just do it. Left foot first. Right foot. Left. Right. Left. I walked.
My right foot met something on the floor. Squishy. Soft. It wobbled like a cheap special effect. I felt it, shivering, quivering, like monster guts in a B movie.
No light. I couldn't see. I cursed: damn darkness. My words echoed back at me like vindaloo cooked with rancid ghee.
But the squishy thing on the floor made no reply.