My usual nit-picking first pass:

Dawn was moving foreward now,

Should be 'forward' here.

Oz was reticent ...

You want something like 'Oz was insistent that prisoners not be harmed,' or better, 'Oz insisted that ....' Or, if you like the word 'reticent,' 'Oz was reticent about harming prisoners.' 'Reticent' is a synonym for 'reluctant' or 'silent,' depending on usage.

with the Angel Investigations team.”

Delete the close-quote there.

Nice work, as usual, Victor.

Fixed. Thanks!

Good stuff, Victor.

Yesterday's Guitars

Part Three

London, 2023: Dawn’s face was expressionless as the Council agents took the still-crying girl away from her. She wasn’t as hard as Faith or some of the other slayers, but she could fake it for a while—if she let the horrors she faced on a daily basis get to her, she thought, she’d crack up, and that wouldn’t do anyone any good. Still, the kid was terrified, and she knew what that was like. When she had been a teenager, it seemed she was in danger every Tuesday.

She got better, though. Stepping away from the din, Dawn cleared her mind. Willow had taught her very little magic: Enough to fight, to hunt. She found a place of stillness in her mind, and when she opened her eyes, she could see traces of magic all around her. The walls radiated a sickly green radiation. She walked toward the glow, extending her hand.

“My God,” she said. “He’s been sacrificing girls here for years.”

“Yes,” said Wesley, over the com. “I was afraid that was the case.”

It bothered Dawn how cold his voice was half the time, how disconnected he seemed. She found the thought hypocritical sometimes, but there it was. Sometimes she thought Wesley was just protecting himself. Other times, she was afraid he really was that cold.

“Do you have a trail?” he asked. Dawn concentrated, and glowing, blood-red footprints rose out of the wood floor.

“Yeah,” said Dawn. “I’m gone.”

Dawn was moving quickly now, lest the power of the killer’s presence subside and she lose him. It was a tough trick, aura tracking. It helped that Pavayne was magical, but she was certain the psychic violence surrounding him alone would be enough to hold the trail for a bit. She was right. She exited the building onto London’s streets, and began to run. He hadn’t gone far, she was certain. His aura was soaking into everything around her. His mind was a forest fire, and the entire city was practically burning in it. He was…

Dawn ducked before she knew what she was happening. The sword sliced where her head had been. She spun and kicked, but her foot didn’t connect with anything solid. It was like kicking mist. She was on her feet in an instant.

Pavayne looked like a leathered corpse. His skin was thick and cracked, and there were only shadows were his eyes should be. Dawn looked into the shadows anyway, her sword drawn in front of her.

“So they sent the infamous Dawn Summers after me,” he hissed, in a voice like crushed glass. “I guess they figured out I was free.”

“You can’t stay intangible forever, Pavayne,” said Dawn, forcing the fear out of her head. “I know you can’t move far like that, and you can’t attack.”

“True,” said Pavayne, who stood idly looking at her, a sneer seemingly chiseled into his face. “But you’ve not been paying attention, girl.”

Dawn suppressed a chill. He was right. She hadn’t been watching, and now that she was, she could see a black-tinged luminescence reaching out to him from all directions, pulling his intangible body somewhere else.

“Oh, no you don’t,” said Dawn, leaping at him, sword first. But she wasn’t really thinking about the attack. Instead, the sword became a focal point for her concentration as she tried to synchronize her aura with the killer’s, to be pulled along with him, wherever he was headed.

There was a synesthesia that came with this sort of maneuver, and she knew it was coming, but the sheer toxicity the man emitted felt like swallowing vomit. The world around her began to spin and change color, all of which sounded strangely like off-key carnival music. She swung her sword, but it was no longer in her hand. The two of them were suspended someplace else, and there was no up or down, no depth, just a formless psychedelic wash that extend infinitely in all directions.

Dawn realized she couldn’t feel her hands, then blinked, and realized she could again. She looked up at Pavayne, but all she could see was his static sneer, disappearing like a Cheshire cat. And then everything went black.

And when (continued...)

( continues...) her eyes returned, she was screaming. Her body felt frail and soft, and the light was entirely too bright. She looked around, and realized she was in a bed, and daylight was streaming through the windows. There was an Avril Lavigne poster on the wall, and some old bubble-gum pop song on the radio. The déjà vu came first, the sinking sensation that this was familiar. And then she realized where she was.

“Fuck,” she said, as Britney Spears crooned some song she could barely remember.

Oh. Dear.

here felt like swallowing vomit.

I don't think the "here" belongs.

Dawn’s face was unexpressive

Should this be "inexpressive?"

Fixed and fixed.

or perhaps expressionless?

Still love it.

I like expressionless. It wins. And thanks. I'm having too much fun with my future!Dawn, and I really like Oz's para-Initiative team, so this one should be fun. I hope.