( continues...) brittle jibes. She had done her best to welcome him, and meant it sincerely, but still she had been painfully aware of who he was not.
“I am myself,” he says, echoing her thought. “But I am also him. Or – he and I are both expressions of the same self. I remember some things. Whisps of things. I remember you.” He shrugs, carefully, holding the glass bowl like something unspeakably precious. “I am not him, but – I should like us to be friends.”
“So should I,” she says, meaning it. His smile is dazzling.
“Then we shall make it so.”
Fay, I don't have time to do a machete-level beta, but on a quick read-through, nothing jumped out at me as needing fixing. I love the throwaway line about Destruction becoming Change--it makes sense given Sandman canon, but it was never spelled out, correct?
I love the way you portray the new Dream. The line about the Einstein hair was perfect.
Death watches her curiously.
You want 'Dream watches her ...' here, I think.
“You mean a tip,” she says, smiling.
A 'tip' in British English is a 'dump' in American English, I believe? Death speaks more in a more American style, generally, for all that Mr Gaiman is British, so far as I know. Perhaps this is Brit-picking in reverse, but it jumps out at me.
It's lovely, Fay. I eagerly look forward to more of it.
wrod.(I need to finish reading the Gaiman...damn the murders being so distracting.)
FWIW, erika, in S4 Claire does have a lesbian flirtation. She doesn't get into the sex aspect of it, which kills the relationship, but I can believe it would be different with Faith.
Good calls, both. Cheers!
Erika, you
so
should. Have you read
The Doll's House
yet? With the Serial Killer Convention? 'Cause I think you'll like it.
No, I haven't Fay.
LJ, seems to me I read that somewhere...maybe it planted the Seed of Porn.
“Sister? I am standing in my gallery, and I hold your sigil in your hand. Will you see me?”
This should be "my hand".
That's really lovely Fay.
Deena!
May I ask you for a solid?
May I please request an icon of the Shrub looking blank with the caption "Crime makes you stupid."?
Ranking on the Man and Pembleton quotes. Best.Stuff. Ever.
