he was so obvious that he was clearly a red herring

And, may I say it, a tad bit of a cliche. The ex-detective surprised me. But I'm not one of those who can read a mystery novel and tell you 20 pages in whodunnit. I just don't think long term plot. I'm into character and dialogue. So, all I can say is keep up the good work, Tim! I'm happy with what I've seen so far.

And the response Danny gave to the witness who said you didn't know anal until you'd met whoever. I, of course, can't remember the line now, because my memory sucks, but I loved the way he said it.

"I'll take your word for it."

Strega, I agree with you to a degree. He comes in exactly at the mid point of the story. And given his function, to be the next step in our investigation, I think you want him at that point. He makes sense there, in a narrative way, and one might actually forget about him when the time comes. I originally had the intercut of them in his office and Mel and Danny at the church exactly reversed -- it started with Paul and Rebecca meeting with the wife, then going to them at the church -- but I changed it and put the emphasis on Mel and Danny because I felt one would be ahead of the action. But by making the intercut less about the office and more about the church, that seemed to help it. And I should have cut all the fishing trip stuff. Also, gotta say, the way I had it staged in the script, with kids running around and the action played outside as he loaded his SUV for a trip without any mention of a trip would also have disguised it a bit more. But of course it was pouring rain that day.

I don't watch procedurals often, but I was wondering if it's a common thing for the locations to appear as on-screen text everywhere the characters go?

Next weeks plot does look very interesting. I am looking forward to it.

Still ironing out the final running order, Kristen. I'll keep you updated.

I thought the outside shot of Cole's building looked very much like a building I'd seen on Angel.

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I was wondering if it's a common thing for the locations to appear as on-screen text everywhere the characters go?

You see it sometimes. It can help to keep track of where everyone is, and what time.

Look at me all posty. Can you tell I finished (mostly) my last script? William Mapother as a thousand pound man. The suit cost half my budget. Rob Hall was terrified of doing it -- and it's AWESOME.

I've heard the concept of a serial killer that preys on other serial killers before (on Profiler perhaps?), but spotting them before they kill is a nice new wrinkle. Should be interesting to see the agents struggle with the moral dilemma of saving technically innocent victims while knowing that they may end up endangering more lives as a net consequence.

It only really bothers Paul, Matt.